Sample 2: Requesting a schedule change (formal, named recipient)
Prompt
You are enrolled in a part-time accounting certificate at a community college. You need to move from the Tuesday evening section of one course to the Saturday morning section. Write an email to the program coordinator, Ms. Fraser. In your email:
- Explain why you need to change sections.
- Describe how you will catch up on the work you have missed.
- Propose when the change should take effect.
Sample Answer, 176 words
Dear Ms. Fraser,
My name is Daniyar Toktassyn, and I have been enrolled in the accounting certificate since September. I am writing to request a transfer from the Tuesday evening section of ACC 210 to the Saturday morning section.
To briefly review my situation, my employer restructured our department last month and moved me onto a rotating evening shift. Since that change took effect, I have missed two Tuesday classes and I expect to miss several more if my schedule stays as it is.
In terms of catching up, I have already borrowed notes from a classmate and completed both missed assignments. I would be glad to meet the Saturday instructor beforehand so that I arrive at the same point as the rest of the group.
Regarding timing, I would suggest the transfer take effect from the first Saturday in September. Alternatively, if the section is full, I would appreciate being added to a waiting list.
I look forward to hearing whether the Saturday section has space before the first week of September.
Sincerely,
Daniyar Toktassyn
Why this scores well.
- Task Fulfillment
all three bullets get their own paragraph and a concrete answer, including a fallback for the third.
- Content/Coherence
the three signpost phrases carry the reader from reason to remedy to date.
- Vocabulary
"restructured", "rotating evening shift", and "take effect" are precise rather than general.
- Readability
the salutation "Dear Ms. Fraser" correctly pairs with "Sincerely", and no sentence runs past two clauses.




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